Toby story 1

[Yaoiboy]

It had been a Long Wednesday I had stayed after to do an art project, which turned out better than I thought it would. My friends including my crush, Marco, had gone to a club meeting. My parents work until about six and I didn't want to be at school for so long, so I got a ride with Marco's mother. She was a fierce looking lady with short hair and I can't seem to get it out of my head that she looks like a lioness.

But anyway I sat in the back of the car as is polite and we drove to my house. I live on the way to her house so I didn't feel terribly guilty about riding with her, but it was still a very quiet ride.

We Had made it to my house, she pulled into my driveway, I unbuckled my seat belt and grabbed my bag.

"Hold on just a minute, Toby, I want to ask you something."
"OK."
"You still have that thing for my son." I sallowed and glanced to my house.
"Yes." It was true though I was trying to stop it.
"Could you maybe stop feeling like that, or at least not be so ... vocal about it."

I dropped my head down and closed my eyes feeling the tears bead hot on my lashed. "I would if I could." I pulled my door open and got out.

I walked to my house tears sliding quiet and hot down my cheeks.


(AN: Wow pretty sure I cried while I wrote this. Also THIS DID NOT ACTUALLY HAPPEN TO ME[/b] it was just one of those thoughts of mine.)

[Groks]

Oh my freakin' gosh!! Are you trying to give me a heart attack???

I'm reading this on my little hand-held computer and I'm sure the rest of the family was concerned while I sat on my bed exclaiming, "What??!" I'm gonna slap you.

Good writing, though, fiction or not, you could definitely feel for Toby. Umm... perhaps you and your spell check could become really good friends.

[Groks]

And oh yeah....your sentences were so much better here!